The author vaguely states that,” I don’t believe that it will give you a bacon bowl “easily”.” He/she doesn’t state what grounds makes him/her believe so. Moreover, he/she doesn’t explain why he/she thinks the ad is ‘ridiculous’.
The piece is well done. The author gives a detailed synopsis of the ad, the claims made and the methods used to convince people of the truth. Nevertheless, the author doesn’t state who is making these claim, which is an essential part of the assignment. The author should have elaborated how the system does slim the body fat. What is the science behind it? And is the method tested and proven to work? The author does make a few spelling mistakes e.g. he/she writes excerise instead of exercise and clincial instead of clinical. I also feel the author should have given his or her opinion on the claims made in the ad. He/she should make his/her stand known as to whether he/she thinks the claims are plausible or not and give reasons justifying the