The tone of the document is sad and compassionate as the author gives the story of nurses who fail to take care of kids. The kids in this context were the authors’ siblings. At the time their parents were looking for a job and were not stable enough to sustain them.
The paper does not have an introduction or a conclusion. The author simply gives details that are not well organized. In fact, the reader finds it very difficult to understand what the author wanted to talk about right from the onset of the essay. The essay could have been organized to make it more understandable to the reader through giving it a proper introduction, organization of single thoughts in own paragraphs, and lastly a summary of the essay.
I noticed several mistakes in the essay. Among the mistakes include spelling mistakes, such as “pacients” instead of “patients”, “toll” instead of “told”, “studing” in the place of “studying” and “some times” instead of “sometimes.” The author also had tense issues, for instance, where he/she used “was” in the place of “were.” In the essay, punctuation errors are also evident where the author used capital letters in the middle of the essay. Some words are also missing in the essay.
The mistakes made it very difficult for me to follow the author’s ideas throughout the essay especially where words were omitted in the essay. In the event that I filled in words that I thought were right, I lost the meaning of the essay. I took a lot of time re-reading the essay so as I understand what the author was trying to say in their work.