The paper has two thesis statements. One is that society should accept Samuel Morse’s declaration of his invention of the telegraph. And the second is shared credit should be given to his predecessors paving the road for long distance communication.
The thesis was clearly stated. Arguments to support both stands were presented but it was not balanced. The latter side was more substantiated, failing to lay down stronger arguments on why society should accept Morse’s claim.
The writer could have discussed about how Morse came up with the invention from his artistic background: how Morse had this device on his own design and how he developed this telegraph despite lacking the technical knowledge. The writer could also answer the question regarding what inspires him to do this demonstration.
The outline was strategic and logical. The opening statements claim how important telegraph is, arousing the reader’s interest. The valuable contribution of Morse’s predecessors, especially Chappe’s was explained. It was written clearly, and because of the absence of jargons, it could be easily understood. The statement about how the telegraph changed the society is very necessary. However, the distinctness of Morse’s telegraph could be explained